homework story's

WALT:  Entertain

Description: We read the poem “My Remarkable Journey” which inspired us to write our own remarkable journeys about why our homework wasn’t at school today.

{here is my story}

I work up i got out of bed draged my feet on the ground I remebered that it is homework day, I HATE homework day but if i come up with a idea to say i forgot my homework I could get out of doing my homework ever again. I had the most awesome idea  that bubble bee stole my homework because he thought it was the matrix of leader ship so he could bring optmas prime back to live so they could beat meagtron and starsream but when he put it in optmas he did’t come back to live. But then he saw some writing that told him were the real matrix of leader ship. So I went with him bubble bee to steal my home work back but. there was one problem he could shot me when i run away with my homework. so i thought if i stay with him he would’t shot me and i could see were the real matrix of leader ship was it was deap down in the derst. i siad bubble bee i see some thing  glowing so we run over there. we found it now we can bring optmas back to live we run as fast as we could to optmas we found optmas bubble bee but it in optmas he got up he said to me how are you i said alex he said thank you for helping bubble bee bring my back to live so he toke me home and i run of to school with out my homework because it fellow out of my hands.

Criteria:

We decided that a quality piece of writing has the following things. 

Reflect on whether these things are in your story:

Introduction: It hooks the reader in the first few lines making them want to read more

Punctuation: Is your writing ready for a reader? Does your punctuation make

it easy for them to read?

Short sentences: Do you create suspense by using these in your writing?

Onomatopoeia: Are these in your writing to create impact?

Alliteration: Are these in your writing to create impact?

Similes/Metaphors: Are these in your writing to create impact?

Evaluation:

1. What do you think is the best part of your story?when bubble bee stole my homework

2. What was the hardest part about completing this portfolio sample? there is no hard parts to this sample

3.  Next time, what is a goal you can work towards?to get more green on the

Criteria

Feedback

i think you u did very good with your post and your story

Feedforward:

but you need to add more detail 

feedback and feedforward by kadince